This recount is about
my 2013 Christmas recount!
ENJOY!
It’s Christmas eve & elfelfa has drawn all over our
faces (well technically he has made us like Rudolph).He’s been naughty all
month now .Just in case you don’t who elfelfa is he is an elf that Santa gave
us .It’s 8:30PM and I can’t get to sleep.
It‘s 5:15 AM, I slowly tip toe down to the Christmas-tree. I
was itching to open my presents but I sadly couldn’t .I quickly tiptoe to Mum & Dad “IT’S CHRISTMAS”I shout to Mum
& Dad ,Then I went to Nanna & Poppy “It Christmas” We said ,Then we
when to Cleon & Michelle to get uncle Brenty & aunty Kata “It
Christmas” .Then we raced back inside to open up our present. 5:30 and uncle
Brenty & aunty Kata still haven’t got out of bed! The first thing got was a
Lego F1 set .My favourite thing was from Mum & Dad it was a: go-pro!, I
also got a flat cap, a AWSOME star wars glow in the light tee-shirt and the 2014
Guinness world records & officially amazing .For lunch we had salad, turkey,
chicken & lamb with bon-bons .I got a magic trick and a puzzle type thing.
After lunch we were all exhausted & full .Ryan, Ben, I
got to play our X box while Mum & Nanna slept .I played a racing game
called need for speed Pro Street & Banjo & kazooie nuts & bolts.
Then we played micro charges .Micro charges are these micro cars that go around
a track.
For dinner we had leftover .I had 2 prawns, salad, lamb
& chicken .For desert I had ice-cream & the flavour was Neapolitan .Then
we went to sleep .
THE END
Hope you liked it =).
I liked it Matthew. You do however, need to be more careful with your full stops . In some. places. .they are all over the place. Remember you always finish the sentence with a full stop then do a space bar. Looking forward to the next entry. Love Mum xx
ReplyDeleteP.S I love your blog design. You will have to keep on blogging or I will have to steal it! xx
ReplyDeleteWell done Matthew. This is a great start to your journey for improved writing. You can't start at the finish line, but you are have made a good start. You may find go back and editing your recount beneficial...... can you see any areas for improvement? I look forward to reading more of your posts and to see the improvement in your writing. Love Dad
ReplyDeleteHi Matthew,
ReplyDeleteYour blog was very interesting but I think it may need just a bit of editing to, as Ryan would say, awesomify it. However Poppy and I will always be grateful to be reminded of a wonderful Christmas Day. What's next? love Nanna R xxxxx
Well written matthew.....how long did it take you to write
ReplyDeleteHey Bud,
ReplyDeleteI think your writing is great but I would love to set you a challenge. In your next blog can you include an unusual word that you could not usually use? I will be checking back to see if I can guess what the word is. Make sure the word is interesting, correctly spelt and unusual. I hope you are up for the challenge. A Jackie
Challenge accepted!
Deletehia matt,
ReplyDeleteyour blog is actually so cool!
i loved your recount, you did a very good job, hard to beat!
bye bye, kayla